Feb 26, 2015

And They Spread Their Wings


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In the crimson sky
I see a flock of white birds
Spreading their wings east
I am here, alone, wishing
They will sing for me again


© 2015 Balqis


** This is my first Tanka.

17 comments:

  1. I'm trying to find words to compliment your beautiful poem. In Bangla Literature there's a try to attach the longing to the birds, before the evening when they fly away in a flock.

    Your words wonderfully attached that longing- the picture sadden that feelings even more! :)

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    1. Thank you so much, Omo, for your kind words and understanding of Tanka. This is my first try penning my thoughts in 31 syllables. I have been reading and trying to understand what Tanka is, and just a give a try for this one. :)

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    2. I like the Tanka format- it's kind of extended Haiku, with the extra 7-7 syllables. :)

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  2. Salam. Petang-petang, kalau dekat laut especially, mesti ada nampak scenery mcm ni... sangat menenangkan.. :) love your beautiful words... :)

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    1. Waalaikumsalam Lynn. Pemandangan di waktu senja memang menakjubkan. Thank you so much for commenting. :)

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  3. Those are songs of serenity :-)

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    1. Ahh...I wish they aren't so. Thank you for reading. :)

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  4. May them sing for you again so you can enchant us with your beautiful lines Balqis.

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    1. I keep my fingers crossed. Thank you for your kindness, Marie. :)

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    1. Thank you, blogoratti. I appreciate your comment. :)

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  6. Nice tanka Balqis and you've taken a good subject!

    Hank

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    1. Thank you, Hank. Your words are the encouragement for me to try more. :)

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  7. I also love to hear the song of birds , I hope the white birds will come again to sing for you :)

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    1. How nice to know about it, Aunt Mary.

      Thank you for giving me hope. :)

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    1. The pleasure is mine.

      Thank you for visiting and sharing the info of your post. Keep writing! :)

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